☽ Silver Milenium ☾

Mars wrote:

Silberjahrtausend

DARE TO DEMAND THE WORLD OPEN ITS DOORS TO YOU

Magic

Magic Name: シルバー・ミレニアム Silberjahrtausend | Silver Milenium
Magic Type: Solitary Lost Magic
Description: Mars uses the power of her planet Mars and the moon Luna in order to fuel her magic. She works under the cover of darkness when possible to preserve the secret of her identity. Mars' magic is beautiful thanks to its mystical appearance that has a lot of relation to the stars and cosmic reality. It can also be very cruel and unyielding. She uses fire even though she has a dislike for too much sun or heat. This magic is mostly offensive and has less defensive or supportive ways it can be used. Mars does aim to be very balanced and have different options in battle. Stars do not always indicate the light. Mars' magic is dark and evil in origin, and she works closely with lost spirits in order to utilise their powers.
Unique Abilities:

• Ability 1: Mars is able to see in the dark no matter how little light is in her surroundings. She is stronger when it is night time or when she is indoors. However, she is weakened when under harsh direct sunlight. She can chant "Soft, evil Spirit!" [悪霊退散 Akuryo Taisan] this will summon a malevolent lunar shadow that gives her a 50% buff to cost reductions and give her HP/MP Regen at 5% per post. ❀ [UAs can have a max of two effects and you have three here; the cost reduction, the HP regen, and the MP regen. Please choose two of these three. Should you choose to keep the cost reduction, since you are D rank, it needs to be lowered to 40% since it is passive and thus is reduced by 10%.]
  
• Ability 2:
  
• Ability 3:
  

Spells

Name: バーニング・マンダラー Feuerringe | Burning Mandala
Rank: D
MP Cost: 20 MP
Category: Offensive | Defensive
Type: Multi Target
Damage: 30 HP  ❀ [Since this is dual category, you need to add the "Durability:" stat beneath the "Damage:" stat. It can take 2x rank damage, which in this case it can shield 60HP.]
Range: 45m
Speed: 45m/s ❀ [This should be 30 m/s]
Duration: 3 posts
Downside: The spell is weaker to water but stronger against wind magic. ❀ [This isn't a downside per our downside mechanics. This area is used for sacrificing one or more stats to increase another stat. This note can either be moved to the description as plot/flavor (since we don't have an elemental mechanic) or removed/replaced.]
Description: Mars creates a ring of fire behind her that automatically expands to cover her to block an attack that is targeting her ❀ [Please reword this a little. The shield can shield the user from damage, but not necessarily "block an attack". If any incoming damage is over the durability of the shield, at least some of the damage from the attack could go through.] . She can shoot eight small flaming rings out of the one behind her, these attacks set enemies ablaze.

Name: ファイヤー・ソウル Feuerball | Fire Soul
Rank: D
MP Cost: 20 MP
Category: Offensive
Type: Single Target
Damage: 40 HP
Range: 60m
Speed: 60m/s
Duration: 3 posts
Downside:
Description: Mars raises her hands in the direction of the enemy, shooting out a huge stream of fire in a burst, this burns everyone it hits. She gives herself a 50% buff of spell speed/range. ❀ [Since this is a single target spell, it can only hit one enemy per post. By the wording, I wasn't sure if "burns everyone it hits" was a general statement for the nature of the spell or if you intended to try and damage more than one enemy per post with this. Also, you must choose here whether to buff spell speed or spell range, since those are separate stats. Alternatively, you could buff both but split the 50% between the two.]

Name: マーズ・フレイム・スナイパー Macht des Marsfeuers | Mars Flame Sniper
Rank: D
MP Cost: 20 MP
Category: Offensive
Type: Single Target
Damage: 40 HP
Range: 60m
Speed: 60m/s
Duration: 3 posts
Downside: She channels this spell before casting, making it more powerful. ❀ [This isn't a downside per our downside mechanics. This area is used for sacrificing one or more stats to increase another stat. Please either remove this or replace it.]
Description: She shouts, "Mars! Power of Fre, win!" and conjures a bow and arrow out of fire, then she shoots at a target piercing their body and setting them on fire. Due to the flames' properties, they are increasingly susceptible to further damage, making them 50% less resistant to magic.

Name: ファイヤー・ソウル・バード Phönix | Fire Soul Bird
Rank: D+
MP Cost: 30 MP
Category: Offensive
Type: Multi Target
Damage: 45 HP
Range: 68m
Speed: 45m/s
Duration: 5 posts
Downside:
Description: A more powerful version of Fire Soul. This spell supports Mars in using other magic, because the phoenix increases her spell damage by 75%. It also gives her the effect HP/MP Regen at 5% per post. When it swoops through the air it can attack multiple times on each dive, good for scattering crowds and clearing space. ❀ [Please describe what the spell looks like. Is it a fire bird that is swooping? Also, D+ spells get two effects max, and you have three here with the spell damage buff, the HP regen, and the MP regen. Depending on what you choose for your UA above, keep in mind that you are only allowed to max out at 5% every post for MP regen.]

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Mars wrote:

Silberjahrtausend

DARE TO DEMAND THE WORLD OPEN ITS DOORS TO YOU

Magic

Magic Name: シルバー・ミレニアム Silberjahrtausend | Silver Milenium
Magic Type: Solitary Lost Magic
Description: Mars uses the power of her planet Mars and the moon Luna in order to fuel her magic. She works under the cover of darkness when possible to preserve the secret of her identity. Mars' magic is beautiful thanks to its mystical appearance that has a lot of relation to the stars and cosmic reality. It can also be very cruel and unyielding. She uses fire even though she has a dislike for too much sun or heat. This magic is mostly offensive and has less defensive or supportive ways it can be used. Mars does aim to be very balanced and have different options in battle. Stars do not always indicate the light. Mars' magic is dark and evil in origin, and she works closely with lost spirits in order to utilise their powers.
Unique Abilities:

• Ability 1: Mars is able to see in the dark no matter how little light is in her surroundings. She is stronger when it is night time or when she is indoors. However, she is weakened when under harsh direct sunlight. She can chant "Soft, evil Spirit!" [悪霊退散 Akuryo Taisan] this will summon a malevolent lunar shadow that gives her a 50% buff to cost reductions and give her HP/MP Regen at 5% per post.
  
• Ability 2:
  
• Ability 3:
  

Spells

Name: バーニング・マンダラー Feuerringe | Burning Mandala
Rank: D
MP Cost: 20 MP
Category: Offensive | Defensive
Type: Multi Target
Damage: 30 HP
Range: 45m
Speed: 45m/s
Duration: 3 posts
Downside: The spell is weaker to water but stronger against wind magic.
Description: Mars creates a ring of fire behind her that automatically expands to cover her to block an attack that is targeting her. She can shoot eight small flaming rings out of the one behind her, these attacks set enemies ablaze.

Name: ファイヤー・ソウル Feuerball | Fire Soul
Rank: D
MP Cost: 20 MP
Category: Offensive
Type: Single Target
Damage: 40 HP
Range: 60m
Speed: 60m/s
Duration: 3 posts
Downside:
Description: Mars raises her hands in the direction of the enemy, shooting out a huge stream of fire in a burst, this burns everyone it hits. She gives herself a 50% buff of spell speed/range.

Name: マーズ・フレイム・スナイパー Macht des Marsfeuers | Mars Flame Sniper
Rank: D
MP Cost: 20 MP
Category: Offensive
Type: Single Target
Damage: 40 HP
Range: 60m
Speed: 60m/s
Duration: 3 posts
Downside: She channels this spell before casting, making it more powerful.
Description: She shouts, "Mars! Power of Fre, win!" and conjures a bow and arrow out of fire, then she shoots at a target piercing their body and setting them on fire. Due to the flames' properties, they are increasingly susceptible to further damage, making them 50% less resistant to magic.

Name: ファイヤー・ソウル・バード Phönix | Fire Soul Bird
Rank: D+
MP Cost: 30 MP
Category: Offensive
Type: Multi Target
Damage: 45 HP
Range: 68m
Speed: 45m/s
Duration: 5 posts
Downside:
Description: A more powerful version of Fire Soul. This spell supports Mars in using other magic, because the phoenix increases her spell damage by 75%. It also gives her the effect HP/MP Regen at 5% per post. When it swoops through the air it can attack multiple times on each dive, good for scattering crowds and clearing space.

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