Chaos Legions

Magic

Primary Magic: Chaos Legions
Secondary Magic:
Caster or Holder: Holder
Description:

Eien is a goddess of chaos and that position comes perks, one of them is she has made her own army. while the true Eien can summon Hundreds of legionary's in a single instant. Earthland Eien can only summon a few, she does this by having a direct link with them. this is done by crest she has in her body, and these crest are linked with a direct copy of the crests which are held by the legions she wishes to summon to earthland. While these legions seem like inhuman beings that is only because there true soul and body are not ever used, the body's and souls they use in combat are different and only their consciousness in transferred to the body's. while this is a great boon as the lives of her soldiers are never lost, just the body's they use for combat, a death can still have back lash on the consciousness though. While Eien loves her people she also knows that one day she will have to order them to war, and thus they are under constant training. the unit that EL Eien has been giving command of is a newer one, while fresh they are still very capable, as they were some of the best candidates that her army had seen. while she may not know there name but she still cares for them, and thus will protect them as they protect her.

Strengths:

Is not Magic in anyway or form uses souls and Vital Force to Create the Legions.

All summons are at Eien's Rank no matter what. Eien also gain a buff based on legion type summoned. Legions can't be dispelled in anyway except by being dismissed by Eien.

Vital Force is recovered by damage dealt to enemy's.

Weaknesses:

Only has 10 Crests total(Last one to be created later)

Vital Force Does not Passive Regen

Can only have One active Legion at any time(Support Legion ability's can still be used)

Souls start at full for each thread but CANNOT BE REGENERATED AT ALL

Lineage: Juvenile goddess of Chaos:

Desription of Things:

Base Land Speed:legions have a speed of 812 feet per minute(this is 13.5 per) second


Phasing: Is a Legion stepping into a shadow realm of sorts and moving position, this is done at a near instant speed, this all keeps them safe from any harm. This teleport is not considered magic, but a ability of the Summons. Phasing distances is marked on Legions if they have the ability to do so.

Constraints regarding rank: If Eien were to attain H rank somehow only 1 Legionary(of any type) can be summoned at H rank once per thread at double cost with a duration of 3 posts. All bonus are doubled and any stat or effect is multiplied by 3(Example: Needle would be able to phase 90 meters and heal 6xH rank.) but only adds 1 to damage multiplier.(Example: Guilt would now Do 2xH rank damage) Any legion that cant phase now gains the ability to phase up to 30 meters and those who already can get the distance multiplied by 3.


Mechanics of Chaos Legions summons.


Vital Force: Vital force is the driving energy of this "Magic" . Vital force does not have a passive regen and can only be regained by Damaging enemy's. This is Regain at one point per hit, of any kind, made by Eien. This included all weapon and martial attacks she makes on a enemy's. 

Souls: Souls determine the amount of Legions that can be used. Souls start at max for any thread, but can not be regain no matter what. Legions can be summoned in deference amounts depending one who many souls are used in the summon. 

Vital Force  15/15 (will increase by 1 per rank)
Souls 20/20 (will increase by 2 per rank)


Abilities/Powers:

Legion soul: Legions have souls and thus cant be dispelled as they qualify as living people, attempting to do so is like trying to dispel a human it doesn't work.

Linked: All Legion are considered to be wearing armor and item that Eien is wearing(armor, magic ring and such) Even if they have no effect. Not all legions gain the full benefit of this ability due to there equipment restrictions they are listed in the legions drawbacks.

Legions

Guilt:

Malice :

Arrogance:

Gained at C Rank:

Flawed:

Hatred:

Gained at B Rank

Pride:

Failure:

Gained at A Rank

Needle:

Ultima:

Alright, hey there, I'll be the one reviewing this magic for you.

Now, there are a lot of things that need doing before I get into the spells, so let's start off with just the general magic, shall we?

To begin with, there is no description on this magic.  I was able to puzzle what it can do, due to my ability to comprehend this by looking at your strengths and weaknesses, and I was able to make an image, however, you NEED a description, period.  The description is there to give everyone an exact image of what the magic is, and what it's capable of.  So, please, add a description.  Also, I'd like to have it explained as to how this magic is a holder type.

Next, all of your summons cannot be equal to your rank at all times.  Now, there's no problem upgrading your summons to match your rank, which will free the spell slot that it previously occupied, however, they all cannot match your rank, for a very simple reason - it's literally impossible.  I understand that you clarify your H-Rank thing on the bottom (which really should be near the top, so we don't have to go look for it), but, let's for arguments sake say you've achieved S-Rank, which, who am I to tell you that you can't get there?  Though it will be difficult.  ALL of your summons are now S-Rank?  ...That can't work, for multiple reasons.
The first reason is that there simply enough spell slots to contain that many summons in that rank.  I believe the maximum amount of spell slots according to rank are:
D-Rank; 4 (10 if all are bought, 11 at H-Rank, and 5 naturally at H-Rank)
C-Rank; 3 (8 if all are bought, 9 at H-Rank, and 4 naturally at H-Rank)
B-Rank; 3 (7 if all are bought, 8 at H-Rank, and 4 naturally at H-Rank)
A-Rank; 3 (6 if all are bought, 7 at H-Rank, and 4 naturally at H-Rank)
S-Rank; 2 (4 if all are bought, 5 at H-Rank, and 3 naturally at H-Rank)
H-Rank; 1
That also leads to your next problem.

If all summons are always equal to your rank, no matter what, then you already run out of spell slots at C-Rank, assuming you don't purchase more, so that strength cannot work at all.  While we're on the strength, your legions CAN be dispelled, however, not in the way you might think I mean; everything has a durability.  What I'm saying is, if enough hits are dealt to the legion, they WILL retreat to heal themselves the moment their "health", so to speak, goes to "zero", or unless the duration simply ends. This means that, while the soul thing is extremely cool, it can't work the way you're trying to make it work.

As for this magic not using any magical energy... I'm not entirely sure what to do with this yet, so we'll keep that part on hold.

Finally: with your Linked ability, if your character is wearing say a... I dunno... Let's say a ring, and it has the ability to give you a boost in let's say... Speed. Does this apply to ALL of your legions?

I'm missing some key points, I feel it, but, I'm tired, and I'm sick, so this will have to do for now. Apologies for the massive wall of text, and please bump once the changes are made~

approved. Great job cooperating with us. Enjoy blowing stuff up!