East

Name: East
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Birthday: 03/14
Sexuality: Straight
Special Characteristics: Non

Personality: Outside of battle: He is very opened and likes to talk a lot. He is very direct, maybe too much, he can sometimes be a bit harmful with people and doesn’t notice his influence. Even do, he is very good person and always tries to make you feel better. He likes people to be happy as him. He loves to rite, it his favorite way of communication but he also likes to talk, and a lot. He can sometimes talk for several hours but always knows when to stop. He was teachen that everybody is meant to live so he never kills. East doesn’t really get angry that easy but when he gets mad, he is like a cold atomic bomb in your pants, but very very cold. As he doesn’t like to kill, he is vegetarian and doesn’t even eat fish because some vegetarians do eat fish. He thinks a lot everything and always doubts about what he is about to do. Even when he likes people to be happy, he is his first priority, he is extremely competitive and would do almost anything to win. He also never uses weapons, except for his book, and will never fight if not necessary. He is very stubborn, because he really does what he wants when he want, the only thing he won’t do even if it means wining, its harming a friend, not like just fighting with the friend, this means harming like really doing them something bad, including something mentally bad, not only physically. He always maintains a promise. He is not very secure with himself. Finally, he loves to bet, it’s his number one priority. Some things he can’t support are people who lie to him and tries to cheat against him because he will never cheat and hopes other people think the same and battle as noble as him. He is not strict and is very light thinking, meaning he doesn’t really matter many things. He really likes to have fun.
Inside a battle: He always pressures his self so he battle good and that way, he won’t let down his friends because that’s another thing he doesn’t like, letting down his friends. He can easily change his mind during battle and can doubt in middle of a battle which means that people can easily cheat on him making him doubt and paralyzing him to make an opportunity to strike. If that is done, he will get terribly mad and may even try to kill you for a moment, but he will not do it, if he is about to do it, he will stop and regret. During battles he can get very rude comparing with when he is not battling. He will always try to stop the battle if he can fight extremely noble. Always starting a battle, he asks the enemy if he wants to give up before harming them. All this “rules” in his personality (fighting noble, trying to stop the battle, etc…) can disappear in East if the enemy harms or wants/tries to harm a friend. He will never refuse to a fun battle. When having a leader, he usually works well, he is actually good following orders, but he will know if it’s necessary to break a rule or a order.
Likes:
-Competing: He likes to be competitive and being the number 1 in everything.
-Writing: He likes to express his self by writing anything or any kind of book, poem, etc...
-Helping: He likes to see people around him happy, that makes him happy.
Dislikes:
-Flying: As he is afraid of the heights, he doesn't like to fly, he gets terribly scared.
-Eating meat: Meat or any food that means they have to kill an animal to make it.
-Danger: He doesn't like at all dangerous situations but only if a friend is in danger.
Motivations:
-Helping: He only wants to see people being happy and he thinks the best way to do that is helping. When he helps, he fees that he accomplishes her mothers last wish, making a better world.
-Having fun: What he wants to do in his life is make the best to use it in a good way. As he knows very good the life will end in some time, he want's to make a good use of it making himself happy.
-Family: When he was little, he had his parents and his sister helping each other in difficult moments because they where poor. When someone needs help, he always remembers his family, specially her mom, she was her best friend and was one of the reasons he needed to live.
Fears:
-Heights:He is obviously afraid of falling and... dying.
-Rabbits:He can't explain it, but he is just afraid of them.
-Darkness:He starts imagining that he is in a high place or other things when he can't see.

General Appearance


Height: 5 feet 11 inches aprox
Weight: 150 pounds aprox
Hair: Blue
Eyes: Blue
Skin Tone: Light
Appearance: He is skinny and likes to use dark jeans with a hood style shirt. Its usually dark blue, he likes dark colors. His swimming suit is dark as well.

Guild/Council

Guild: Eclipse soul
Tattoo: In his left part of the chest. Its Blue.
Rank: D

Hello, and welcome to the forum~

There are a few things that need to be tweaked mainly in your personality. I made all the regarding notes in teal, so look over them, and post a bump in this thread once you are done making changes so I can look at it again. Feel free to PM me if you need any info or assistance~

EastT wrote:Name: East
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Birthday: 03/14
Sexuality: Straight
Special Characteristics: Non

Personality: Outside of battle: He is very opened and likes to talk a lot. He is very direct, maybe too much, he can sometimes be a bit harmful with people and doesn’t notice his influence. Even do, he is very good person and always tries to make you feel better. He likes people to be happy as him. He loves to rite, it his favorite way of communication but he also likes to talk, and a lot. He can sometimes talk for several hours but always knows when to stop. He was teached that everybody is ment olive so he never kills. East doesn’t really get angry that easy but when he gets mad, he is like a cold atomic bomb in your pants, but very very cold. As he doesn’t like to kill, he is vegetarian and doesn’t even eat fish because some vegetarians do eat fish. He thinks a lot everything and always doubts about what he is about to do. Even when he likes people to be happy, he is his first priority, he is extremely competitive and would “Kill” to win. He also never uses weapons and will never fight if necessary, necessary includes the need to win in something or proving something. [Okay the two sentences here are very confusing, not only by their construction, but they seem to contradict each other?] He is very stubborn, because he really does what he wants when he want, the only thing he wont do even if it means wining, its harming a friend, not like just fighting with the friend, this means harming like really doing them something bad, including something mentally bad, not only physically. He always maintains a promise. He is not very secure with him self. Finally, he loves to bet, its his number one priority. Some things he cant support are people who lies to him and tries to cheat against him because he will never cheat and hopes other people think the same and battle as noble as him. He is not strict and is very light thinking, meaning he doesn’t really matter many things.
Inside a battle: He always pressures his self so he battle good and that way, he wont let down his friends because thats another thing he doesn’t like, letting down his friends. He can easily change his mind during battle and can doubt in middle of a battle which means that people can easily cheat on him making him doubt and paralyzing him to make an opportunity to strike. If that is done, he will get terribly mad and may even try to kill you for a moment, but he will not do it, if he is about to do it, he will stop and regret. During battles he can get very rude comparing with when he is not battling. He will always try to stop the battle if he can fight extremely noble. Always starting a battle, he asks the enemy if he wants to give up before harming them. All this “rules” in his personality (fighting noble, trying to stop the battle, etc…) can disappear in East if the enemy harms or wants/tries to harm a friend. He will never refuse to a fun battle.

[Okay so this personality has the correct amount of words but I can't approve it. It needs to be a description of how your character thinks and act more than a summery. It's also a bit confusing, often contradictory. I recommend that you try and go over it again. A good trick to not get too lost when working on something with a big word count is too make a few paragraphs, maybe you could try that out? Like one for East in relation to others, his views on fighting, how he acts when he must fight, how he is under a leader etc. Contact me if you need any help regarding this :3]

Likes:
-Competing: He likes to be competitive and being the number 1 in everything.
-Writing: He likes to express his self by writing anything or any kind of book, poem, etc...
-Helping: He likes to see people around him happy, that makes him happy.
Dislikes:
-Fighting: He doesn't like to harm anybody, but he does like to have a fun fight. [Then in this case fighting wouldn't be a dislike? This is contradictory with your personality too]
-Eating meat: Meat or any food that means they have to kill an animal to make it.
-Danger: He doesn't like at all dangerous situations but only if a friend is in danger.
Motivations:
-Helping: He only wants to see people being happy and he thinks the best way to do that is helping.
-Having fun: What he wants to do in his life is make the best to use it in a good way.
-Family: When he was little, he had his parents and his sister helping each other in difficult moments because they where poor. [How exactly does this motivate him? You could develop that a bit and use it in your personality paragraph per example]
Fears:
-Heights:He is obviously afraid of falling and... dying.
-Rabbits:He can't explain it, but he is just afraid of them.
-Darkness:He starts imagining that he is in a high place or other things when he can't see.

General Appearance


Height: 1.8 mts [Convert to feet and inches]
Weight: 150 pounds aprox
Hair: Blue
Eyes: Blue
Skin Tone: Light
Appearance: He is skinny and likes to use dark jeans with a hood style shirt. Its usually dark blue, he likes dark colors. His swimming suit is dark as well.

Guild/Council

Guild: Eclipse soul
Tattoo: In his left part of the chest. Its Blue.
Rank: D

Ready, but i think i missed some things.

This is already much better- way less confusing. I just need you to add a sentence or two in your "in battle" part of your personality about how East behaves in battle under a leader. There are also still some errors here and there that could probably be fixed quite easily by re-reading and correcting the first part of your paragraphs?
But that's about it, once again, bump the thread when you're done~

Ready xD

Okay, thanks a lot for making the required modifications effortlessly. Your character sheet is approved. However I would recommend that you give a look to our manual and tutorial sections before heading directly to the RP to be completely ready. Have fun~