Hi Kaori, my name is Tamashi and I'll be grading your battle pet this time around. Any suggestions or requests I make will be in this wonderful shade of purple. If you have any worries, concerns or questions don't hesitate to post them and I'll get back to you as soon as I can.
Bump when ready and I'll come and have a look.
- Grading:
- ○Kaori wrote:
Name: Izuchi
Rank: Legendary
Species: Blood Onyx Dragonhound
Type: Combat
Description
(Anything that's above Kaori's rank scales)Seeing Ikuchi in his Dragonhound form, you'd see a massive head with large, demon-like horns pointing behind it. The head would have many exposed teeth, and be decorated with black, gem-like scales that had crimson trimming on the ends. These scales continued down the back of Ikuchi, all the way to the tip of his tail. His sides, and belly were covered in a thick, dark grey, leathery material that may as well be on a rhino. His four massive claws were the same material as his scales, and were razor sharp. In terms of size, Ikuchi stood at six feet tall while standing on its four massive legs, fifteen feet from nose to tail, and three feet from shoulder to shoulder. Those who see Ikuchi in his human form would see a man who wore a pair of black dress shoes polished to a perfect shine. In the middle of the bottom lace was a solid gold flower, a hibiscus. He wore a set of black dress pants to match, and a well cared for shirt of the same color was tucked into them. From his neck dangled another golden hibiscus, as though it were symbolic to the man. His broad shoulders gave way to normal sized arms, the muscular structure hidden behind black silk sleeves; courtesy of his dress shirt. The man wore a dark grey tie that had a crimson outline on the top, and holding the two tie ends together and preventing wind from flicking them about was a golden clasp.CombatBeing part dragon, Ikuchi is able to perform a variety of attacks. Attacks with his claws, breath, and scales all count as a melee attack as they require no magical ability to perform. While in animal form, he's capable of dealing great deals of damage just as his ancestors do. While in human form, he takes on a more stealth oriented type of combat. He'll utilize his surroundings, as well as use actual weapons to bring his opponent(s) down.Ranged Attack Speed & RangeRank Speed in
Meters Per SecondRange in
MetersB 150 200 A 225 300
Non-Magic SkillsIkuchi's trained in several skills necessary for serving his master. He knows how to speak various languages while in human form, pick most non-magical locks, and read maps. As a predator, he knows how to track and hunt, as well as how to use stealth tactics.- Meteor Storm:
- Name: Meteor Storm
Rank: A Rank
Type: Offensive
Duration: Up to 7 Posts
Cooldown: Up to 10 Posts
DescriptionThis spell can be used as either a short-term DoT, or a Long-Term DoT. When used short-term, it can last for 1 to 4 posts; in which case the cooldown is 5 posts. When used Long-Term, it can last for 5 to 6 posts; in which case the cooldown is the duration +1. If used for Extra Long-term (7 Posts) the cooldown is 10 posts.This is an aoe and so is bound to the same distance and speeds as an aoe of the rank. Please lower it to 150m and 112.5 m/s.
I personally have no issue with this as it's clear, this being said the duration and cooldown should be static on abilities.
Ikuchi causes it to rain meteors made of molten onyx (Earth/Fire) for a set number of posts. The meteors rain for a 300 yard radius at a speed of 225mps, each causing a 6 yard radius explosion upon impact. The heat becomes so intense that armor equal to and below the rank of this spell no longer reduce damage, and only absorb 25% damage instead of 50%. At the same time, each post enemies within the spell's range will take 40% ability rank damage until the spell concludes.
Strengths
Weakens armor
Deals damage over time
Weaknesses
Doesn't negate armor
Damage over time is slow
The attack can be consumed by slayers
- Copy:
- Name: Copy
Rank: B Rank
Type: Variable
DescriptionIzuchi is able to copy on of Kaori's spells and use it as an ability. The duration and cooldown of this ability is equal to that of the spell copied. If the copied spell is of higher rank, its effect is scaled to equal this one's rank.Strengths
I can't allow this ability as it stands currently since there are several loopholes. You can use a random spell from your arsenal without mp use, the spell in question will not go on cooldown for you and it allows for a spell that is on cooldown to be used a second time. Please remove the last part, you would not be allowed to copy a spell of a higher rank even if it did scale down.
The suggestions I can give to fix these issues are when it casts the spell your spell of the same name goes on cooldown, that you must sacrifice the mp so the spell can be cast and perhaps that it can only cast that one spell inside the thread. (if job or pvp thread of course not social)
Copies one of Kaori's spells
Weaknesses
Cannot produce an effect above B Rank
Cannot be used in rapid succession
Name: Divine Blessing
Rank: Legendary
Type: Weapon
Description
A blessing that acts differently depending on which form Ikuchi's in.
§ Dragonhound Form §In this form, the blessing manifests as a tattoo under his scales that enhance his claws, spikes, and lungs for combat use.Give the enhancement a percentage please and is this for magical, physical or both?
§ Human Form §In this form, the blessing manifests as a tattoo on Ikuchi's left and right hands that can become either a Katana, Dagger, Bow (300m/225mps), or Battle Axe.Strengths
Applies melee damage boost across the board in Dragonhound form
Weaknesses
Only applies melee damage to the weapon in human form
Limited utility in Dragonhound form- Overheat:
- Name: Overheat
Rank: A Rank
Type: Offensive
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 4 Posts
DescriptionIkuchi can build up the fire in his body and merge it with magic to turn it into a much more powerful form. This version fires as a 2 foot radius cylinder in a straight line and can melt straight through armour equal to or below this ability's rank. As the flame is always a mix of Gemstone+Fire, or molten Gemstone; it retains this elemental property. The attack has a base damage of 1.25x ability rank, with a range of 200 meters. The speed is 150 meters per second at B Rank, increasing to 300 meters per second at A Rank. The cause for the jump is that his body is able to fire the attack faster, rather than for a longer distance.Please state that it's non magical armour it can melt
Strengths
Creates a powerful attack
Weaknesses
Can't hit many targets due to being a bit small
Is weaker while used in Human Form
- Copy:
- Name: Copy
Rank: B Rank
Type: Variable
DescriptionIzuchi is able to copy on of Kaori's spells and use it as an ability. The duration and cooldown of this ability is equal to that of the spell copied. If the copied spell is of higher rank, its effect is scaled to equal this one's rank.As stated above on the first copy ability you had, I can't allow this ability as it stands currently since there are several loopholes. You can use a random spell from your arsenal without mp use, the spell in question will not go on cooldown for you and it allows for a spell that is on cooldown to be used a second time. Also please remove the last part, you are unable to copy spells of a higher rank even if they where to scale down.
The suggestions I can give to fix these issues are when it casts the spell your spell of the same name goes on cooldown, that you must sacrifice the mp so the spell can be cast and perhaps that it can only cast that one spell inside the thread. (if job or pvp thread of course not social)
Strengths
Copies one of Kaori's spells
Weaknesses
Cannot produce an effect above B Rank
Cannot be used in rapid succession
Name: Divine Blessing
Rank: Legendary
Type: Armor
Description
A blessing that acts differently depending on which form Ikuchi's in.
§ Dragonhound Form §In this form, the blessing manifests as a tattoo under his scales that emits a barrier that acts like armor. It's always present unless broken, in which case it doesn't shatter like armor but just enters an inactive state.Please say how much damage is needed before the barrier is broken.
§ Human Form §In this form, the blessing manifests as a tattoo on his back that is partially inactive. In order for Ikuchi to use the shield, he needs to direct and activate the blessing otherwise he'd take full damage. When the shield's durability is used up, the blessing becomes completely inactive- meaning the abilities can't be used.State how much damage the shied can take before being inactive
Strengths
Always active in Dragonhound form
Weaknesses
Not completely active in Human form
Requires Ikuchi to know where to block to be useful in human form- Time Shield:
- Name: Time Shield
Rank: A Rank
Type: Debuff
Duration: 3 Posts
Cooldown: 5 Posts
DescriptionIkuchi creates an aura that slows the speed of everything except himself within 100 meters by 75%. Those of higher rank are slightly protected by the flow of mana within them, causing the effect to be weaker against them.Strengths
Slows down time to give Ikuchi more time to react
Weaknesses
The attack's max range is shorter than those of its rank by 50% (66% at A Rank)
Has a fairly long cooldown that would prevent spamming of the ability
- Lick Wounds:
- Name: Lick Wounds
Rank: B Rank
Type: Healing
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 4 Posts
DescriptionIkuchi can heal a target for 0.75 B-Rank healing, and 0.75 B Rank MP by licking them. In human form the licking is replaced with a kiss. A more intimate kiss can be used to heal full B Rank HP and MP, but requires OOC permission.Strengths
Heals MP
Heals HP
Weaknesses
Can only be done on 1 target
Cannot be done on himself
Requires physical contact to work, not a ranged ability
Name: Divine Blessing
Rank: Legendary
Type: Magic Item
Description:A powerful blessing bestowed on Ikuchi's kind that lets them change forms. He gains certain benefits depending on which form he's in. The way his equipment looks, and functions is also changed as a result of this blessing.Strengths
○ Form Switch, Part 1:
§ Dragonhound Form:
• This item appears as a tattoo under Ikuchi's back scales
• Can fire spikes from his body as a non-magic attack
• Breathes Molten Gemstones (Earth/Fire) as a non-magic attack
• Speed is increased by 25% (+5% per rank) for all within 150 yards
• Can communicate with Kaori telepathically
• Makes no sound while moving
§ Human Form:
• This item appears as a mask that covers Ikuchi's eyes
• Can requip items with no abilities, and fire them as a non-magic attack
• Use a Molten Gemstones (Earth/Fire) non-magic attack from his palm
• Non-melee damage increased by 25% (+5% per rank) for all within 150 yards
• Can communicate with Kaori telepathically & audibly
• Makes no sound while moving
Form Switch, Part 2:
§ Dragonhound Form:
• Magic Power Regen increased by 5% for all within 200 yards.
• Can track a target from anywhere in the world by scent
A little overpowered, give it a range
• Can hear for miles even with white noise
• Can see with eyes closed
• Can swim above and below waters
• Can be ridden
§ Human Form:
• Magic Power Regen increased by 5% for all within 100 yards.
• Can track a target from anywhere in the world by scent
This is a little over the top, give it a range.
• Can hear for miles even with white noise
• Can see with eyes closed
Go into a little more depth with this please
• Can swim above and below waters
• Can pick non-magical locks
• Can speak any major language
• Can read a map
Provides a passive boost to himself and allies depending on which form he's in
Weaknesses
Cannot provide both passive buffs from each form at the same time
MP regen does not increase with rank
Bump when ready and I'll come and have a look.
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