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    Ghost
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    Second Magic: Twilight Saga
    Third Magic: N/A

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    Post by Ghost on 5th September 2019, 6:52 am

    Ok ready for 2nd overlook


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    Post by Johann on 28th September 2019, 2:42 pm

    Heya Ghost, Joh here to grade your magic. All of my edits, as usual, will be in this color

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    @Ghost wrote:Magic

    Magic Name: transmutation Alchemy
    Magic Type: Summon/Lost (Please specify the benefit levels for both of these magic types, i.e. which one is primary and which one is auxiliary)

    Description:  He is even able to copy certain spells and effects. The user can steal the souls of others to regain Hp and Mp by absorbing them. This also allows him to copy their very DNA from looks right down to their very magic which is his own way of doing copy magic. Even if they did not use it so long as it is in his Rank class he can cast it. This magic also allows him to summon beings to aid him in battle as well. From Celestial spirits to his very own creation. Most importantly it allows him to create construction out of his soul itself. Even gaining the memory of all the souls he has absorbed. This is soul magic one of the first four magic to come into existence.
    The power of Resurrection.

    By using the magic the user is always gaining more Hp and Mp. This is because(plot reason he is dying by the second). He could use the souls to gain strength in combat or even boost his own allies combat abilities. The user could even copy other people magic and very looks. Taking in their memories as well. By using souls the user could even recreate damaged body parts by pure will power. When it comes to bringing all so sneaky tactics to the battle look no further then soul magic. The user could even remake his body from nothing by using his disembodied soul. (All of these abilities you are ascribing to yourself are site mechanics and should be contained within abilities, not the description of your magic. A description is a place to simply describe the use of your magic while mechanics such as copying magic etc. should be exclusively limited to spells and abilities. As such, I will have to ask you to rework this description to include absolutely no abilities whatsoever and move the abilities you are giving yourself to spell slots or other ability slots)

    Unique Abilities:

    • Ability: The user will start any thread with 15% stacking ability.-D Rank (There is no such thing as stacking ability. Please clearly define what exactly you are referring to or I will have to ask you to rework this ability)
    • Ability: The user starts any thread with 15% more Mp and Hp. B Rank (In abilities where HP is buffed nothing else may be buffed along with it so I must ask you to remove the MP increase from this ability)
    • Ability:The user will gain a 40% buff in speed attack and defense as well as 50% hp buff upon entering the Twilight Realm.-S Rank (This ability far exceeds the maximum percentage for S rank abilities, which is 60% total, while you have 130% in this ability total, and as such I must ask you to lower this to fit within the percentage maximum. Further, there is no stat called either attack speed or defense, and as such I must ask you what these buffs are referring to. If these are synonyms for spell speed and damage reduction I need you to specify which damage reduction it is you are increasing, magical or physical, and by how much as well as changing the buffs to these exact things. Lastly, this ability contains an active increase to HP that is tied to a condition, which is not allowed. I must ask you to remove the HP buff entirely or make it passive, in which case you would have to remove all other buffs from this ability since nothing may be buffed alongside HP in abilities where HP is buffed)





    Spells:

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    Name: Alchemy: Soul Blast
    Rank: C
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Single Target
    Damage:  60Hp
    Range: 120 meters
    Speed: 120 meters
    Duration: 1
    Downside: N/A
    Description: Calling up his souls he will fire a green beam of soul energy at his target up to three tine. Those who are hit by this will take 60hp damage as  5% hp will return to the user. (Since this is a single target spell you can only fire a single beam per post at a single opponent. Please correct this accordingly)

    Name: Alchemy: Soul Soulful
    Rank: C
    Category: Auxiliary (Auxiliary spells don't do damage. Since this spell does damage, however, I must ask you to change this to Offensive)
    Type:  AOE
    Damage: 30Hp
    Range: 100m (The maximum range of a C rank AoE spell is 60 meters, so I must ask you to lower this accordingly)
    Speed: 100 mps (The maximum speed of a C rank AoE spell is 30 meters per second, so I must ask you to lower this accordingly)
    Duration: 4
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user will call forth his soul energy as he drains the life force away from any living being within range of him. This regain him 5% hp as they take 30 hp damage per post. (This spell is currently worded like an auto-hit as it offers opponents no chance to dodge the spell and its effects, so I must first ask you to correct this mistake. Further, the spell contains what I presume is a DoT effect, which would mean the total damage you can deal with this spell would be 2.5x the original damage for a spell of this rank and type, meaning 75 HP total. This spell, however, deals 4x 30 HP, so 120 HP total, which is too much for a C rank AoE DoT spell. I must ask you to lower the duration to 2 posts or lower the damage to fall within the maximum total for a spell of this rank and type)

    Name: Alchemy:Soul Empowerment
    Rank: C
    Category: Supportive (Supportive spells are spells that heal. This spell does not contain any healing, damage, or durability and as such should be classed as Auxiliary)
    Type: Burst
    Damage: 45% Attack and Defense buff (See below)
    (Missing a Range)
    Speed: 30 meters
    Duration: 5
    Downside: N/A
    Description: Using his Souls he will send them into his allies as they gain attack and defense of 45%. (Neither attack nor defense are stats that can be buffed. Please change both of these into actual stats that can be buffed. Further, this comes down to a total buff of 90%, while the max you can buff in a C rank active buff is 55%, so I must ask you to lower the buff percentage to be within that total)

    Name: Alchemy: Dragon
    Rank: C+
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Single Target
    Damage: 80hp
    Range: 165 m
    Speed: 225 mps (The maximum speed for a C+ rank spell is 180 meters per second, so I must ask you to lower this accordingly)
    Duration: 5
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user creates a 50 meter dragon construct made out of his souls. This dragon will be able to charge right into anything the user sees fit. Causing massive damage. (Since this is a single target spell I need you to specify that the dragon can only attack a single enemy per post and only perform a single attack within that same post)


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    Name: Alchemy: Soul Crush
    Rank: B
    Category: Offensive
    Type:  Multiple Target
    Damage: 80Hp
    Range: 150 meters
    Speed: 110/meters
    Duration: 6
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user causes a soul wave to flash over the targets in the area. Causing them to take extreme pain from their souls. Which will cause them to lose 60 Hp per post and applies immobilizion for the first post. (This spell contains what I presume is a DoT effect, which would mean the total damage you can deal with this spell would be 2.5x the original damage for a spell of this rank and type, meaning 160 HP total. This spell, however, deals 6x 80 HP, so 480 HP total, which is too much for a B rank Multi Target DoT spell. I must ask you to lower the damage or duration to fall within the fall within the maximum total for a spell of this rank and type)

    Name: Alchemy: Soul Wrap
    Rank: B
    Category: Supportive
    Type: Burst.
    Damage: Depending on the target effects at the time. (Every spell requires a set value for its damage, durability, and healing, and as such I must ask you to include a definitive number here)
    Range: 50 meters
    Speed: 50 meters
    Duration: 6 meters
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user will hit the target with a soul wave. Causing him to inherit the effects of the target. Rather that be a healing buff or attack buff etc. The percentage will cap at B rank of the effects taking place on him. While also giving the target a debuff of 50% of the effect full power. (This spell in its entirety is not permitted and I must ask you to change this to something else completely. You cannot, under any and all circumstances, absorb someone's buffs at all)

    Name: Alchemy: Slumber Soul
    Rank: B
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Multiple Target
    Damage: % x target regen
    Range: 200 meter
    Speed: 200 meter
    Duration:6
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user will cause slumber on his target souls causing them to. Force fall into a deep slumber over the next few posts (Forcing a target to sleep is an immobilization effect and thus limited to a single post. Change this accordingly or remove this). Try as they might. But by the time the spell reaches its 3rd post all his rank and below will fall victim to this effect. The slumber effect will take place instance as well as reversing any healing done to them by effects. So if they take 15% hp regen then instead they take a 15% hp damage instead etc. (You cannot reverse the healing/regeneration someone has benefited from into damage/drain under any and all circumstances. This part of the spell is, in its entirety, not legal, and I subsequently must ask you to remove it)

    Name: Alchemy: Historia
    Rank: Statless (Rank is required, even with statless spells)
    Category: Statless (Category is required, even with statless spells)
    Type: Stateless (Type is required, even with statless spells)
    Damage: Statless
    Range: Statless
    Speed: Statless
    Duration: Statless (Duration is required, even with statless spells)
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user will summon the Historia of his victims past. The Historia will be under his compete control. ( This is a plot ability and I will need Ooc permission to cast on Pc and their NPC)

    Name: Alchemy:Majinn Beast(Grande)
    Rank: A+
    Type: Summon
    Requip/Summon Melee Damage:47 hp
    Requip/Summon HP:360
    Range: N/A (Please include a range for this summon)
    Speed: 150 meters (The maximum number for A+ rank burst speed is 110 meters per second, so I must ask you to lower this accordingly)
    Duration: 9
    Downside: N/A
    Description: User will summon his Majinn Beast to attack his victims.
    Abilities: The Majinn Beast Gains 50% more attack and Defense once it's hp gets down To 50% (Abilities may not be included in the description of the summon. Please remove this)

    Ability 1:

    Name: Self Destruction
    Rank: A+
    Category: Offensive
    Type:  Area of Effect
    Damage: 47hp
    Range: N/A (Please specify a range for this ability)
    Speed: 150 mps (The maximum number for A+ rank AoE speed is 110 meters per second, so I must ask you to lower this accordingly)
    Duration: 9
    Downside: N/A
    Description: At any given moment the Majinn Beast could blow itself up. Causing massive damage in the area. This will leave it's targets with a 50% defense and Speed debuff (Defense is not a stat. Please change this to an actual stat that can be increased or decreased instead as seen under "Buffs" in the magic and spell rules)

    Buff:

    Spoiler:

    Name: Alchemy: Your Soul Is mines.
    Rank: A
    Category: Auxiliary (This spell deals damage and as such should be classed as Offensive)
    Type: Burst
    Damage: 100 Hp
    Range: 75 meters
    Speed: 75 mps
    Duration: 2
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user will absorb the soul of his target. This is done by two ways either he will out right absorb it or the target(s) in his range to suck the soul out. By doing this the target(s) will have a 50% speed debuff and a 25% debuff to their defense. (This is worded like an auto-hit since it automatically absorbs souls, giving enemies no chance to dodge the spell and its effects. As such I must ask you to include a realistic way for targets of this spell to dodge it and its effects or I cannot approve this. Further, this spell contains a total debuff of 75% while the max you can debuff in ana ctive A rank debuff is 65%, and as such I must ask you to lower this to fall within the permitted percentage value for a spell of this rank. Lastly, defense is not a spell that can be debuffed. Please change this to an actual stat that can be increased/decreased or remove this entirely)


    Name: Alchemy: Mirror Match
    Rank: A
    Category:  Auxiliary
    Type: Single Target, Multiple Target, Area of Effect, Burst.(Depends on target spell) (Please specify a set spell type for your spell)
    Damage:
    Range: Target spell range (Please specify a set range for your spell)
    Speed: target spell range (Please specify a set speed for your spell)
    Duration: 3
    Downside: target spell DS (Please clearly define your downside. If this spell doesn't contain a downside please remove this section)
    Description: The user becomes a complete copy of victim. Copying their very looks right down to their magic and can even cast the magic of theirs up to his rank. (You absolutely cannot, under any and all circumstances copy entire magics. This is simply not allowed and I must ask you to remove this aspect of the spell entirely, if not this entire spell itself if this is not changed in accordance with the rules for copy effects as specified in the effects section of the magic and spell rules. Further, to make yourself look like a target you need explicit OOC permission when used to change into any kind of Player, player-owned NPC or Event NPC or when used on a player, player-owned NPC or Event NPC. If this is not inlcuded in this spell I cannot allow this under any circumstance)

    Name: Alchemy: Resurrection
    Rank: A
    Category: Supportive (Supportive is a category reserved for healing spells. This spell contains neither damage, healing, or durability and should thus be changed to Auxiliary)
    Type: Area of Effect Burst (Please pick either of the two, not both)
    Damage: N/A
    Range: 25m
    Speed: 100 mps (The max speed for both an A rank AoE or Burst spell is 75 meters per second, so I must ask you to lower this accordingly)
    Duration: 2
    Downside:  N/A
    Description: Tge user is able to rise himself from nothingness and anyone else if he could. By using the souls he has collected. ( Ooc permission is needed for their PC and NPC (Please further that even with OOC permission, this spell may not be used in PvP under any circumstance as it would mean you could negate a defeat in such a situation entirely)

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    Ghost
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    Post by Ghost on 1st October 2019, 12:24 pm

    Ready for 2nd overlook
    Johann
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    First Magic: Saga of War - Ragnarök
    Second Magic: Consecration of War - Einherjar
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    Post by Johann on 3rd October 2019, 2:49 pm

    It seems like you accidentally deleted your magic. Consequently, there is nothing for me to grade here. Please fix this if you wish for this grading to continue. Give me a bump once that's been done


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    Second Magic: Twilight Saga
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    Post by Ghost on 7th October 2019, 8:45 am

    Magic

    Magic Name: Alchemy Soul Unleash
    Magic Type: Lost (Auxiliary)
    Description: Everything has a soul this was what the user learned. The moment he took up the dark arts to forced it into light. With this magic the user can suck the soul out of anything and one. Regaining his hp in the process of doing so. He could control the souls of the elements allowing him to shape the very weather into his likeness. Even summon monsters or make construction out if the souls ge collected.

    Tge user will use this magic. To create monsters to fight for him and change the weather. To better help him out. By absorbing souls. He will regain his strength to continue to fight.


    Unique Abilities:

    • Ability:Soul Force. Starts all threads with 5% more hp and mp. D
    • Ability:Gains 15% more hp from souls he absorbs as long as he is in the Twilight Realm.
    • Ability:



    Spoiler:

    Name: Alchemy Soul Copy
    Rank: B
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Single Target
    Damage: 80hp
    Range: 200 meters
    Speed: 200 mps
    Duration: 2
    Downside: Must pay same cost as target to cast spell.
    Description: The user will copy any spell his target does up to B rank. Giving that this is an Auxiliary. The category could change depending on the said spell which was copied. Also the user is only able to copy that spell for the duration of the spell.

    Name: Alchemy Speed
    Rank: B
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase movement Speed by 50%. By using his gather souls.

    Name: Alchemy Soul Power
    Rank: B
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase magical damage by 50%. By using his gather souls.

    Name: Alchemy Force
    Rank: B
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase physical damage by 50%. By using his gather souls.

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    Name: Alchemy Boost
    Rank: A
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase magical  damage and Speed of allies by 25% each.


    Name: Alchemy Soul Make Dragon.
    Rank: A
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Multiple Target
    Damage: 75hp
    Range: 225 meters
    Speed: 165 mps
    Duration: 5
    Downside: N/A
    Description: Using his gather souls the user will create a Chinese dragon of legend. The dragon will attack its targets by crashing into them as of it was phasing through them. This will also give the targets a 20% debuff in movement speed for the duration of the spell.


    Name: Alchemy: Your Soul Is Mine
    Rank: A
    Category: Offensive"
    Type: Single Target
    Damage: 70hp
    Range: 300 meters
    Speed: 300 mps
    Duration: 2
    Downside: The target could dodge this as the aura beam is being shot at them.
    Description: The user will drain the soul of his target. This will cause 10% hp drain and 70hp damage. The user will create a green aura around his hand and fire it at his target. Once the target is hit with the aura he will cause damage and drain the target hp. This will restore his hp up to 10% as well.

    Name: Alchemy Transmutation ( Majinn Beast)
    Rank: A+
    Type: Summon
    Requip/Summon damage:47 hp
    Requip/Summon HP: 360
    Range: 300 meters
    Speed: 300 mps
    Duration: 9
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The User summon his infamous Majinn Beast to aid him in battle.
    Abilities:

    Ability 1:

    Name: Rage
    Rank: A+
    Category:Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: The Majinn Beast has 25% physical damage and 25% magical damage buff.


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    Ghost
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    Posts : 276
    Guild : Fairy Tail
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    Age : 1019
    Experience : 7950

    Character Sheet
    First Magic: Time Keeper Power
    Second Magic: Twilight Saga
    Third Magic: N/A

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    Post by Ghost on 7th October 2019, 9:43 am

    Ok it has been The Remade yet better
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    Age : 28
    Mentor : Ruvel
    Experience : 3,044,137
    Brownie Points : Kebab∞

    Character Sheet
    First Magic: Saga of War - Ragnarök
    Second Magic: Consecration of War - Einherjar
    Third Magic: Maledict of War - Berserkir

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    Post by Johann on 14th October 2019, 2:49 am

    Your magic is entirely missing the following aspects required for a magic application:

    • Magic Name
    • Magic Type
    • Magic Description
    • (Unique Abilities)


    Please add these to the magic before I can properly grade this app


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    Lineage : Time Keeper's Curse
    Position : Rising Star
    Posts : 276
    Guild : Fairy Tail
    Cosmic Coins : 0
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 1019
    Experience : 7950

    Character Sheet
    First Magic: Time Keeper Power
    Second Magic: Twilight Saga
    Third Magic: N/A

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    Post by Ghost on 15th October 2019, 9:16 am

    Ok I put it back dint know how it went missing. Its ready
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    Age : 28
    Mentor : Ruvel
    Experience : 3,044,137
    Brownie Points : Kebab∞

    Character Sheet
    First Magic: Saga of War - Ragnarök
    Second Magic: Consecration of War - Einherjar
    Third Magic: Maledict of War - Berserkir

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    Post by Johann on 21st October 2019, 12:09 pm

    More edits, same color

    Spoiler:

    @Ghost wrote:Magic

    Magic Name: Alchemy Soul Unleash
    Magic Type: Lost (Auxiliary) (If this magic has no other type beside "Lost" this should be Solitary)
    Description: Everything has a soul this was what the user learned. The moment he took up the dark arts to forced it into light. With this magic the user can suck the soul out of anything and one. Regaining his hp in the process of doing so. He could control the souls of the elements allowing him to shape the very weather into his likeness. Even summon monsters or make construction out if the souls ge collected.

    Tge user will use this magic. To create monsters to fight for him and change the weather. To better help him out. By absorbing souls. He will regain his strength to continue to fight.


    Unique Abilities:

    • Ability:Soul Force. Starts all threads with 5% more hp and mp. D (In abilities where HP is buffed nothing else may be buffed alongside it so I must ask you to remove the MP increase)
    • Ability:Gains 15% more hp from souls he absorbs as long as he is in the Twilight Realm. (Please clarify this. What exactly does this buff entail? Is this an increase to spell healing or another stat?)
    • Ability:



    Spoiler:

    Name: Alchemy Soul Copy
    Rank: B
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Single Target
    Damage: 80hp
    Range: 200 meters
    Speed: 200 mps
    Duration: 7
    Downside: Must pay same cost as target to cast spell.
    Description: The user will copy any spell his target does up to his rank. (Please clarify that this spell can only copy spells of B rank or lower. Please also clarify that only a single spell per post may be copied, and that spells may only be copied once during their entire duration. Further, this spell does not possess a damaging component, it seems, and so the spell shouldn't be classed as Offensive or have an associated damage value. Please remove the "Damage" portion of the spell and change the category to "Auxiliary" or rework the spell to include a way for it to actually damage opponents)

    Name: Alchemy Speed
    Rank: B
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase movement Speed by 50%. By using his gather souls.

    Name: Alchemy Soul Power
    Rank: B
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase magical damage by 50%. By using his gather souls.

    Name: Alchemy Force
    Rank: B
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase physical damage by 50%. By using his gather souls.

    Spoiler:

    Name: Alchemy Boost
    Rank: A
    Category: Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: Increase magical  damage and Speed of allies by 25% each. (At current, the max number of spell slots you have in this magic is limited to 12 total. As such, the maximum number of spells you can make passives is limited to 1/4th of 12, which is 3. As you have already made your B rank spells passives, I must ask you to rework this spell into an active spell instead)


    Name: Alchemy Soul Make Dragon.
    Rank: A
    Category: Offensive
    Type: Multiple Target
    Damage: 75hp
    Range: 300 meters (The max range for an A rank Multi Target spell is 225 meters. Please lower this accordingly)
    Speed: 300 mps (The max speed for an A rank Multi Target spell is 165 m/s. Please lower this accordingly)
    Duration: 5
    Downside: N/A
    Description: Using his gather souls the user will create a Chinese dragon of legend. The dragon will attack its targets by crashing into them as of it was phasing through them. This will also give the targets a 20% debuff in movement speed for the duration of the spell.


    Name: Alchemy: Your Soul Is Mine
    Rank: A
    Category: DOT/Supportive (DoT is not a valid category. Further, this spell deals damage, whereas spells of a "Supportive" category are spells that heal. Please clarify this or change the category of this spell to "Offensive")
    Type: Single Target
    Damage: 30hp
    Range: 300 meters
    Speed: 300 mps
    Duration: 4
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The user will drain the soul of his target. This will cause 10% hp drain and a 40hp Dot for the duration of the spell. (This spell, at current, doesn't possess a way it interacts with its environment at all. As such, this is worded like an auto-hit, with the spell being cast and automatically affecting opponents. Please include the way the spell manifests physically as well as a realistic method for opponents to dodge the spell and its effects. Lastly, the damage specified under "Damage" and in the description of the spell do not match. Please clarify this)

    Name: Alchemy Transmutation ( Majinn Beast)
    Rank: A+
    Type: Summon
    Requip/Summon damage:47 hp (The max damage for an A+ rank summon is 42 HP. If this is a grande summon, please note that somewhere in the spell)
    Requip/Summon HP: 360 (The max HP for an A+ rank summon is 300 HP. If this is a grande summon, please note that somewhere in the spell)
    Range: 300 meters (The max range for an A+ rank summon is 110 meters. Please lower this)
    Speed: 300 mps (The max speed for an A+ rank summon is 110 m/s. Please lower this)
    Duration: 9
    Downside: N/A
    Description: The User summon his infamous Majinn Beast to aid him in battle.
    Abilities:

    Ability 1:

    Name: Rage
    Rank: A+
    Category:Auxiliary
    Type: Passive
    Description: The Majinn Beast has 25% physical damage and 25% magical damage buff.


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    Transmutation Alchemy Soul Unleash  Johannsiggies

      Current date/time is 19th November 2019, 7:00 pm